1. Include the link to your blog here:

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2. Which of your pieces most helped you identify or explore and develop your God-given abilities? Discuss.

The piece that really helped me identify and develop my God-given abilities was the research topic essay because that essay required us to talk about my worldview and what I believe. This essay made me think about what I like to do and what I am really passionate to talk about. This connects because it helped me identify what my God-given ability is and how I should develop it. It helped me identify that music is my God-given ability and I should improve and develop this skill to worship God.

3.Which of your pieces best demonstrates your ability to communicate effectively? Give three reasons and explain.

The piece that best demonstrated my ability to communicate effectively was probably the restaurant review. This is because I was able to clearly use adjectives to explain what I saw and ate, I used strong word choice to make the readers more captivated to my writing, and organized my writing in a way that sounds flowing and makes it easier for the readers to read it. I feel like I was able to do this in this piece of writing and it showed my ability to communicate effectively.

4. Which piece either demonstrates striving for excellence, or discusses striving for excellence and its importance in another area besides writing? Explain.

The piece that discussed striving for excellence in other areas besides writing was the interpretive poster from “The Merchant of Venice”. I had to strive to illustrate an art piece that properly portrayed the theme of the role of justice. Even though I am not an art person, I strive for excellence and did my best to illustrate a good art piece.

5. Which of your pieces explores why it is important to act as a responsible member of the global community? Explain.

The piece that made me really realize why it is important to act as a responsible member of the global community was The Kite Runner final essay. That essay was all about how keeping the truth is important to us and how lying would affect those around us. This tells us how we should act to be a responsible member of the global community.

6. How did this course help you to know, understand, and apply biblical principles? Explain, giving specific
examples.

After writing different types of writings throughout the year in this course, I have learned how to understand biblical principles and apply them to my writing. For example, the most recent essay of The Kite Runner, I have learned about what the Bible said about truth and how I could apply that to my writing.

7. How did this course help you to think independently, creatively, and analytically? Explain.

This course helped me think independently by having to write all the essays by myself without much help in the beginning. I had to make sure that I was able to write my essay independently without any help or guidance. This course helped me think creatively by having to think of good adjectives to portray my thinking and make sure that my readers are absorbed into my reading. I had to think more creatively and made my essays even more interesting. This course helped me think analytically by having to understand what the research is saying and how I am able to include it to my research topic.

This essay was based on the question “Why is truth important” and how it related to the book “The Kite Runner”.

Truth is what people believe to be true. It is the main thing that creates bonds between people and brings them together. Since there is truth, people can trust each other and the laws of the world. However, I believe that almost all truth on Earth is subjective truth. Everything is believed by people, but there is no guarantee that it is correct. For example, one person can say I am clean, or this is good, but nobody has a 100% correct meaning of what clean means and what good is. Since truth is subjective, people try to twist the truth to make their life more convenient. To them, it may seem like the best thing to do, but withholding the truth simply breaks their bonds with other people and causes people to get hurt. This is seen in the book, The Kite Runner by Khaled Hosseini. Towards the end of the book, it is mentioned in the book that Baba had hidden and stolen the truth from Amir and Hassan that they were brothers for their whole life. Baba even said, “There is no act more wretched than stealing, Amir” (Hosseini, 18). However, since Amir and Hassan trusted Baba because he was their father and master, nobody doubted anything or ever asked him about anything. Baba may have thought that this was the best for everyone, but in the end it just caused Amir to be hurt.
The Kite Runner was about the relationship between Amir and Hassan and how that affected both of them. If Baba didn’t hide the fact that they were brothers, the story could’ve ended really differently. For example, when Hassan was getting raped by Assef under the bridge, Amir was there and watching. Amir said, “He was just a Hazara, wasn’t he?” (Hosseini, 77). One of the reasons why Amir didn’t intervene was because Hassan was just a Hazara. However, if he knew that they were brothers, he most likely would’ve helped Hassan. Also, before Hassan got raped, Amir was going around trying to find him, but was reluctant to ask others for help because he didn’t want others to know that he had a friendship with a Hazara. However, if Amir knew that they were brothers, he might not have’ve not been that reluctant to ask for directions and could’ve helped Hassan faster.
I am sure Baba knew that he shouldn’t have lied, but he still did it because he believed it would have affected his social status and his reputation. If others knew that he had an affair with a Hazara woman and had a baby, they would view him as someone who is not worth their respects and he would be subjugated to insults and torment from others looked down on. Baba chose to be In the end, Baba was selfish and he lied just to save himself from shame and keep a dignified good reputation.
The way Baba thought and acted showed information about the worldview that the book was portraying. The book’s worldview claims that people should keep their social status and do whatever they can to keep it. Baba did whatever he could to keep his status and hid the truth for it. Another example is that Amir told other people that he was looking for his Hazara instead of his friend to keep his status and Baba’s status. An old man said, “What is a boy like you doing here at this time of the day looking for a Hazara? What is he to you?” and Amir answered, “He’s our servant’s son.” He wasn’t willing to say that Hassan was his friend because people would look down on him and would look down on Baba for letting them be friends.
My personal worldview is similar to the book’s worldview but to a certain extent. I do believe that we should try to keep our honor and status, but I also believe that we should keep other people’s honors too. The Bible says, “Let each of you look not only to his own interests, but also to the interests of others.” (Philippians 2:4). I believe that I should put others before me and honor them before myself. People may see lying as a way to keep their own honor, but it dishonors others and makes them struggle. Another thing I believe is that honor is not by what other people say about you, but is by what you personally feel. Lying may make other people think you are clean, but on the inside, you feel guilty. I believe that this is not honor but is in fact dishonoring yourself.
Truth is critically important not only because it is what we believe and what builds up this world, but also how we build new bonds with other people and grow in them. Because there is truth in what we believe, we are able to rely and trust in each other. Giving false truth means to break the bond with someone else and to lose their trust. This is why I believe that truth and keeping the truth is really important. Without it, there would be no community and our world would collapse.

Rough Draft, Peer Edit, and Brainstorm

Reflection:

I really enjoyed this book because I felt the story was really deep and it taught me a lot about my worldview and what I believe is right and wrong. It really made me think why truth is important and what kind of difference it really made whether people keep truth or not.

This was a digital art poster that explained the theme of the role of justice in the play The Merchant of Venice.

Video Recording

Reflection:

I found this assignment pretty difficult because it required deep analysis on the play “The Merchant of Venice”. It required me to be able to understand how the theme is portrayed throughout the story and how it is shown in different events in the play.

This was an essay about the play “Much Ado About Nothing” by Shakespeare.

The film, “Much Ado About Nothing” by William Shakespeare is about a young girl, Hero and her relationship with Claudio, a soldier who was friends with her dad. It was love at first sight and they grew to love each other really quickly. However, because of a trick that was done by Don John, a person who liked to make trouble with other people, their relationship fell apart. Don John made Claudio believe that Hero was making out with someone else and was unfaithful to him, while in reality, it was someone else. Claudio believed it and publicly shamed Hero. Their relationship definitely fell apart and they never saw each other after that for a while. Later, Claudio learns that everything was a lie and Hero was innocent, and he quickly restored her honor publicly. In the end, all went well and the two of them got married.
The main relationship that was mentioned in the film is definitely between Claudio and Hero. It shows how much trust one puts into another person when they are in a relationship. Claudio publicly disgraced Hero because ultimately he felt betrayed by Hero and he let his feelings out into the public. He probably had some feelings of getting revenge on Hero for cheating on him. Because of that, it was important for him to restore Hero’s honor publicly because everything was a lie and he made the public believe in the lie. So he had to set everything back to what it was and make sure everyone knew that Hero is an innocent girl. Another possible reason Claudio did it was because he felt bad for her after everything he said. Small misunderstandings can lead to serious problems in relationships because when you are in a relationship, you put your trust in that person and trust that they won’t break it. So when the trust is broken even by the smallest misunderstanding, it leaves a scar in the heart and it is not something that can be easily repaired. A way to restore the relationship is to rebuild the trust that was between the two people. By restarting the relationship, the trust can be rebuilt and the relationship will be healthy.
An example in my life is my relationship with my best friend from elementary. We would always hang out with each other in school and out of school. However, there was one time where a misunderstanding led to a big change. It was the last year of elementary and my friend had been decided to go to another school. My teacher, knowing that we were good friends, asked me to write a farewell letter to my friend. Unfortunately, I never found the time to write it and ended up not writing it. My friend realized that I didn’t write a letter and got mad thinking that I didn’t care about him. This misunderstanding really hurt our relationship. After that incident, my relationship with him hasn’t been that good and I don’t even have his contacts on any social media. It would be nice if I could talk to him and fix our relationship by apologizing for not writing a letter but I don’t know if I will have the chance to.

Brainstorm

Reflection:

I found the plot of the play really interesting. I struggled a bit trying to understand the English but other than that, I enjoyed reading it. This essay was based on what I understood about the book and how I related to it. I felt like I was really able to understand the book and was able to connect it to a specific event in my life that I find important.

This was a personal original review on a restaurant that I went to go eat.

Peer Edit and Rough Draft

Reflection:

I really found this assignment very interesting because it was unlike any of the other assignments we did and it allowed me to expand my vocabulary on how to express the texture and taste of the dish.

March 24, 2020

This essay was a research essay on a topic related to what we believe and our worldview.

Music teaches us much about ourselves that we can’t learn any other way. It affects how we view the world, how we remember things, and how we feel towards other people. Music is a really important part of our lives and it should be emphasized over other school subjects.
Listening to music has been psychologically proven to affect how we view the world in general. A group of researchers in the Netherlands found that listening to music can change a person’s visual perception and affect how they think and see. Furthermore, the specific type of music we listen to can make a difference in how we view the world. For example, a person who listens to happy music might perceive the world positively, and a person who listens to fantasy music might view the world like a fantasy, or believe in superstitions and superpowers. In the long-term, it is even possible that the type of music the people listen to can affect their personality and mental health.
Another effect music has on us is our memory. This is important because memories tell us important knowledge about our lives, personal attributes, and traits. The startle reaction, also known as the startle response, explains that our brain stem reflexes are systemed to quickly and automatically react to sudden, loud, or dissonant music. Furthermore, this quick response helps us to easily remember the sound which was made. Have you ever wondered why it is so easy to remember a really loud noise during a movie or when someone scares you? This is the reason why.
Humans are created in a way in which we can feel other people’s feelings. We can tell if someone is happy or sad by their actions, facial expressions, or tone of voice. By being able to feel their emotions, we can understand them and have empathy with them. We react to music in the same way that we react to humans. Our brains are wired to unconsciously try to feel the tone or emotion of the music piece we are listening to and to understand it. Music is, in fact, easier for our brain to comprehend than people because the emotion of the music is conveyed clearly through the melody. Humans, on the other hand, are more complicated beings and there may be conflicting emotions expressed through their actions versus their facial expressions. Nowadays, music is used as a medium to portray emotions in many different occasions such as in movies, parties, birthdays, weddings, and funerals. People play fast-paced music at parties to make them more exciting, somber music at funerals to convey the sadness, and lively music on birthdays and weddings to make them happier.
Since music is an important part of our lives, we should be exposed to it at an early age, when we are at school. However, a survey by the University of Sussex in England has shown that in the past two years, the number of schools offering A-level music class has decreased by more than 15% in England. The researchers say that if this continues, it is only a matter of time before music classes are gone. Evidence has shown that music is a really important part of education and music should be kept. Music helps stimulate brain development in children and is a way to relieve stress, improve moods and develop personalities. A study at Northeastern University shows that university students who have been in music classes since they were young have better neural processing capability compared to students who were not involved in music classes. Furthermore, being put into small school bands or ensembles helps students develop social skills and empower them to connect with other people. When a group of people is put together to try to complete a project, they tend to get closer together with each other. This is the same with a band as people will connect with each other to complete their end of the year concert or prepare for a competition, for example.
The above describes the positive effects that music has on us. However, just like everything else, there is a negative side to it. Music has the power to change someone’s personalities and their mental health. Unfortunately, this can go negatively as well. For example, sad music can to make someone feel sad. This could be good when it is needed, but it has the power to make some feel depressed, or even worse, fall into depression. Another example is fast-paced music, which can make people excited and get in a mood for partying and playing around. However, it can make some overly excited and lead them to do things they are not supposed to be doing. Music may have a negative impact on our lives, but this makes it even more important as to why it should be emphasized in our education. It should be taught so that everyone understands music and knows how big of an impact it has on our lives. This way, fewer people will be affected negatively.
Music can affect us and teach us a lot about ourselves that we don’t know. It teaches us how we view the world, how we are able to remember things, and how we feel towards other people. It should not only be kept in our education but be emphasized no less than other subjects.

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Rough Draft and Brainstorm

Reflection:

This was a pretty fun essay because it helped me learn about my worldview and was able to do research on it. However, it was pretty hard because I had to do the right research to find the specific information I need for the essay.

Which of your pieces was the most challenging to write? Give three reasons and explain:

The most challenging piece of writing that I wrote this semester was probably the descriptive essay. One reason was that I had to think of different adjectives to describe the event that was going on. Also, I had a hard time thinking of something that I could talk about descriptively and it really took me a long time to finally decide what to write. Lastly, I didn’t know how to explain different happenings through words from what I experienced. For example, what I felt, heard, or saw; I didn’t know how to write it out so that people reading it could understand. Overall, the descriptive essay was probably the most challenging piece of writing to me.

Which of your pieces was the most enjoyable to write? Give three reasons and explain.

The piece that I most enjoyed writing was the Credo Presentation. One reason that I really enjoyed it was that it was special compared to other pieces of writing, where it wasn’t writing an essay, it was presenting in front of the class. I really enjoyed that and it was the piece that stuck out the most to me. Another reason was that it made me really think back on my life and what I believed. When I first heard the prompt, I was stuck on what to talk about. But as I thought back on what happened in my life so far, it made it easier to think of what to talk about and what I really believed in life. The last reason was that I was able to share with my classmates what I did in my life. I really think that my “story” is quite unique in Hong Kong and I just felt that it was a good experience to share it with my classmates. Overall, the Credo Presentation was the most enjoyable piece of writing to write to me.

What are my strengths and weaknesses as a writer?

I believe that my strength as a writer is that my overall idea or plan for writing is really good and unique. However, the weakness is that I don’t know how to express my thoughts into words and into the essay. I also want to write something and I know it in the back of my head, but when I actually try to write it in word forms in an essay, I get stuck and don’t know what words to use. This is what I believe my strengths and weaknesses are as a writer.

What have you done to develop your strengths and minimize your weaknesses as a writer? How successful do you feel you have been? Explain.

Some things that I have done to develop my strengths throughout the semester is to think more creatively and more uniquely. Some ways I have done that were by reading books with good creatively and very unique stories. For example, a book I read was “Illuminae” by Jay Kristoff and Amie Kaufman. I really enjoyed reading that book and learning about their unique plots. I feel that I have been successful in developing my strengths and making it even stronger. Some things I have done to minimize my weakness was just by writing more and practicing my writing. I believe that that is the only way to minimize my weaknesses and become a better writer. I feel that my writing has improved a bit but not by a significant amount.

What kind of future career or field of study are you considering? What kinds of writing might be important in this career or field? Explain, giving specific examples.

Some fields of study that I am considering are accounting or engineering. For accounting, I will need to be able to compose various types of written documents like letters and financial statements. Accounting requires analysis of statistics and I will need to learn how to summarize the analysis and be able to express it in words. For engineering, I will need to be able to writing reports on incidents, analyses, projects, etc. Again, I will need to know how to express my thoughts into words so that people reading it can understand what happened.

What advice would you offer the College Writing teachers as they plan this unit for next year? What might be some additional pieces of writing to add and why? How were the timing and pacing? Did you receive enough feedback? Did you receive enough instruction and input so you knew how to do each assignment? You can make specific comments about specific assignments here. What did you like or not like and why? What would make this unit more student-friendly, provide more learning, or make it more interesting? Explain.

Some advice I would offer to the teachers is to explain each writing piece more specifically so that students understand what to write about. I feel that the amount of writing and the timing of it was fine and there was enough time for us to finish the writing in time. As I mentioned above, I really enjoyed the Credo presentation as it was something that was different compared to the different writings that we did. I feel that this unit is already pretty student-friendly and a class that everybody enjoys.

October 3, 2019

This was a review on the writing of a novel book that we read. The book that I read was “Miss Peregrine’s Home For Peculiar Children”.

“Miss Peregrine’s Home For Peculiar Children”, written by Ransom Riggs, was a horror and fantasy fiction written in 2011. This novel was the first book of the Miss Peregrine series. Other books in the series include: “Hollow City”, “Library of Souls”, and “Tales of the Peculiar”.

Jacob Magellan Portman was a normal child who was always fascinated by his grandfather’s stories of surviving World War II as a Jew and about peculiar children. The stories became more real when he actually met the peculiars and Miss Peregrine inside a loop. Loop is a place where time is constantly reversed and they all relive the same day every day. Jacob always thought he was a normal child until he learned that he had the ability to see Hollowgasts, who were monsters that attack peculiars. The story revolves around the peculiars and Miss Peregrine fighting against the Hollowgasts and Wights, Hollowgasts in human forms. 

This story was set on Cairnholm Island on the coast of Wales. It revolved around the date September 3, 1940, which is the date that Miss Peregrine sets the loop on. The story’s description of the contrast inside and outside of the loop creates suspense for the readers and makes the plot spooky and creepy. 

There are two main themes in the story. First is family love which was displayed at the beginning of the book between Jacob and his grandfather. Ever since his grandfather’s death, Jacob started to look into the past to learn more about his grandfather, and that was what led him to meet the peculiars. Repeatedly, Jacob met his second family who was the peculiar children at Miss Peregrine’s home. His love for them caused him to want to stay with them and fight against the Hollowgasts and Wights. The other main theme was the fallout of greed, demonstrated through the actions and thoughts of the Hollowgasts and Wights. They were greedy for something that was not attainable: immortality. This caused danger and drove them into chaos. Greed was also present in Miss Peregrine’s family. She didn’t want Jacob to tell the peculiar children anything about the future so that they won’t desire something that couldn’t be obtained.

Regarding the writing of the story, the author did a good job in terms of word choice, fluency, and imagery. The word choice was able to make the mood of the story easier to understand for readers. The story was really fluent and each event flowed smoothly to the next. The imagery created by the word choice and descriptions created a distinct image that was backed up by the pictures featured. 

I really recommend this book to anybody who likes fantasy fiction. The level of this book isn’t too difficult but suitable for young teens and maybe even adults. This book has a really good plot and the descriptive style of writing makes it more interesting.

Brainstorm and Novel Information

Reflection

The book that I read was “Miss Peregrine’s Home For Peculiar Children”. This was a pretty interesting book and it had a really good plot to it. I really enjoyed the word choice of the author, Ransom Riggs, which made everything more descriptive and detailed. Also, the imagery helped create clear pictures in my head.

September 18, 2019

This was an analysis essay on an essay called “Have Smartphones Destroyed A Generation”

In the essay, “Have Smartphones Destroyed a Generation?”, Jean M. Twenge states that the development of smartphones and social media has caused countless differences in our society today. She identified that many teens today are addicted to their smartphones, having it with them everywhere they go, no matter when, and no matter who they are with. Twenge said, “Their phone was the last thing they saw before they went to sleep and the first thing they saw when they woke up.”  She states that phones are like gods to the teenagers in this generation. Their phone is the first thing that they go to when they’re in trouble, when they’re bored, or when they’re having fun. Twenge states that the more time teenagers spend on their phones, the fewer time teenagers spend time hanging out, spend time dating, and spend time sleeping. 

I agree with Jean M. Twenge’s essay, “Have Smartphones Destroyed a Generation?”. This is because as a teenager in this generation, I can tell that most of my time and most of my friends’ time are wasted either playing with their phones or on social media. The section that I agree the most to is when Twenge said, “I’ve observed my toddler, barely old enough to walk, confidently swiping her way through an iPad.” Whenever I go out to eat with my family, there is at least one family that would have their baby fiddling with an iPad or iPhone, and when it is taken away, they start crying so loud that it bothers the whole restaurant. And of course, they get their iPad back. Whenever I see this, I just think of how corrupt the generation is today and how different it was from the past. I don’t feel that there was a part that I disagreed with in Twenge’s essay, I feel like everything that the author said somehow connected to our lives. I feel like this is significant because even though everything Twenge said sounds bizarre and too extreme, what the author said is actually all true and it does connect to our lives. 

Something we can do to stop ourselves from being more corrupt is to set limits on how much time we can spend on our phones or our social media. But the problem is that the person has to be really diligent for this to work. If the person is diligent, then it will work and less time will be wasted. Right now, I do have a limit for usage on phone or social media, but it is not really time-based. I just make a limit that I am not allowed to use my phone or go on social media until all my homework is done and I can only use my phone after that for less than one hour. I felt like it does help me in my time managing and also my spiritual life. Right now for my roots group, I read one chapter of proverbs a day and I clumped that reading into “homework” so that I wouldn’t forget to do it daily, I feel that this really did help me in my life. 

Brainstorm

Reflection:

This essay was pretty meaningful to me because it made me believe that smartphones really did destroy a generation and I believe that it did affect me as well. It made me think back on what it did to me and how it affected me.

September 10, 2019

This essay was a descriptive essay which used different writing tools to make the essay more detailed and expressive.

Once, when I was 15 or 16 years old, my local baseball club went to the finals for the first time in our tournament. It was in April, the temperature was neither cold nor hot, neither sunny nor rainy, neither dry nor wet. I was up in the morning, glaring at my pile of undershirt; one pile of short sleeves on the left and one pile of long sleeves on the right. My mind was floating in the air, thinking of the game as my body remained still in front of the closet. I heard a high-pitched voice shouting from my left, “Faster, we are going to be late!”. I felt my mind pop back in my body and in an instant, I grabbed an undershirt from both piles, my uniform, baseball pants, and my belt. I swiftly got dressed and headed to the living room for breakfast. Time passed and it was finally time to head out.

We got to the stadium and my body was like a stone, every step closer to the field was horrific. Some part of me just wanted to stay at home and skip the finals, but another part of me wanted to compete, compete for the victory, compete for the glory. Before I realized it, my whole team was next to me and it was time to prepare not only our bodies but our minds. Our coaches gave a little pep talk, and obviously, I was not listening, because my mind was in the air, my body heavy as a stone, my stomach invaded by a swarm of butterflies. The quote “time flies when you are having fun” was really applicable to me during warmup. Warmup lasted around an hour or so, but to me, it felt as if it was half a day. Finally, it was time for the actual game. 

As a captain, the first thing I had to do was shake hands with the opponent team’s captains as a sign of sportsmanship. Before I knew, the match officially started. We were batting first; our game lasted for five innings. I felt that our team was not in the best condition and as the game progressed, we were losing by one point by the last inning; the score was 5 to 6. 

The last inning came and it was my turn to bat. I clearly remember everything around me. One out with runners on second base and third base. The first pitch comes. 

“Strike One!”, the umpire shouts. 

Terror ran through my mind as I thought, “my team is depending on me as a player, as a captain, and as the fourth batter, I must hit here!” I could hear my heartbeat as clear as the sky, ba bump… ba bump…, 

The second pitch was a ball and now the count was 1-1. I stepped out of the batter’s box, looked back at the pitcher, and took a deep breath. I stepped back to the batter’s box with my original sequence. Right foot in the box, left foot in, bat placed on the home plate then pointed to the pitcher. My mind was finally ready; at that moment I decided to swing at the next pitch. I saw the ball spin as it came closer and closer, then I made the I-will-definitely-hit-a- homerun swing. CLING! I watched the ball fly, higher and higher, over the outfielder’s heads, but… not a home run; it bounced right before the wall. There was a mixed feeling of happiness and sadness in me. I was overly thrilled for getting an RBI, but I really wanted a home run at that moment. I slid into second base safely, and casually fist-pumped towards my teammates. Our team was able to get another point to make it 8-6.

It was the last half of the inning, which meant that three more outs and we would be the champions! The whole team was shouting that as we ran into our positions on the field. We were all underestimating the opponent team as we went out, we thought it was going to be an easy victory now. We realized it was not after the first batter hit a two-base hit. Our whole team finally woke up from our dream and had to face reality. At that point, I panicked. I was afraid of losing, I didn’t want to miss this first and maybe last chance. It might’ve been just me or it might’ve been my whole team, but we were all determined to get this out first. The first four pitches went by and no ball flew out. The count was 3-1, a disadvantage to us. Finally, on the fifth pitch, he hit the ball. I saw the ball travel to my right, exactly to where the third baseman was. He caught the ball! Not only did we get that out, but we were able to kill the runner on second base too. Not only were we able to get two outs, but now there were no runners on base. Not only were we on the verge of winning, but the momentum was on our side. Finally, we were one step away from victory, one step away from glory. To make sure we were still focused, our coach came to the mound and called all of us. He said, “Just because you’re one out away from being champions doesn’t mean you are champions yet. Don’t lose focus ‘till the end.” I still remember this phrase really clearly, as clear as glass. The count was 2-2, one strike away. Our pitcher wound up and threw the ball traveled in a straight line right towards the catcher. The opponent batter swung as hard as he could, but he did not make contact. The ball went right past the bat and pack! Right into the catcher’s glove. “Strike Three, you’re out!” The umpire shouted as we all screamed in joy. We huddled around the pitcher’s mound, jumping as high as we could, shouting as loud as we could, and celebrating in any way possible. This was the first time my local baseball club won the championship in Hong Kong.

Rough Draft, Brainstorm, and Peer Edit

Reflection:

The essay was a really challenging essay for me to write because it really had to make me think of every adjective used. Also, I have never written a essay like this so it was something new and something that I was not familiar with.